Book Covermms.JPGBevL(QB)’s review of Servant: The Awakening by L.L. Foster
Paranormal thriller/urban fantasy published 2 Oct 07 by Berkley

No, you’re not seeing double. Alicia HAS already reviewed this book and, as she admitted, this is not a genre she would normally read. But since L.L. Foster, writing as Lori Foster, is a very popular contemporary romance author, it would make sense that some of her romance fans would wonder if they will like her work in this new venture. So the TGTBTU team decided it made sense for Alicia– romance fan, but not an urban fantasy fan– to review this book. Alicia, however (cause she’s just so gosh darn nice), was concerned that she would sell the book short just because it wasn’t a genre she was familiar with.

Now, I’m a long time Urban Fantasy/Paranormal fan, in fact they make up probably 80% of the books I read. So, once I read that excerpt in Alicia’s review (you know, the one that made her nauseous *g*), I jumped in and said “Oh YEAH! I REALLY wanna read this!” Since this is a book that’s been talked about for months, we decided that it was important enough to review from a second, completely different POV.

BevL(QB)’s summary of Servant: The Awakening by L.L. Foster
When the summoning comes, it is accompanied by excruciating pain that will not cease until the evil that triggered it is slaughtered without mercy. For God’s paladin, Gabrielle Cody, the summoning also brings heightened psychic awareness, inhuman physical prowess, and a bleak, solitary life.

But for the first time in her 21 years, Gaby has people who care about her, despite her attempts to drive them away for their own safety. Her landlord, Morty, insists on taking care of her. And why does the touch of Luther Cross, the police detective with a pure aura, lesson the pain from the summoning?

Can Gaby rid the world of deranged, cancer ridden, senior citizens and still protect the only friends she‘s ever had? Can she identify and stop the psychotic doctor who used torturous experimentation to enhance the innate evil of the geriatric minions?

If you just skimmed through that blurb without reading it, please give it another go. I‘ll wait. And YEP, that’s it. I kept waiting for something more. But, NOPE, the Big Bad here is nasty old people who serve as minions to the doctor that tortures them while giving them brain cancer. Got it? uh… yeah… that was my reaction, too. And it’s amazing how much slicing and dicing Gaby has to do to kill Ye Evil Olde Pharts.

The first third (at least) of this book is devoted to ensuring that the reader understands what Gaby’s life is like. Okay, we get it– she’s always been alone in this world, she has no hope for the future, she doesn’t want anyone in her life, everything is bleak and depressing and oh so darkity-dark, yadda yadda yadda. No, really, we get it, can we just move on?

I’ve read thousands of books over my lifetime, so I’d like to give a piece of advice to writers (cause I know you’ve all been waiting for the Yoda-like pronouncements of someone who was born without the creative writing gene). Please think of your thesaurus as only an occasional necessity. It should NOT be used to search for multi syllabic replacements for every adverb and adjective in your entire book! If you know you have a serious thesaurus addiction, then uninstall it from your computer and bury your print copies in the back yard. That way you will have to carefully consider whether it is worth your time and trouble to replace “her shadowy surroundings” with “her tenebrous surroundings” or “nictitating illumination” when “winking”, “blinking” or even “intermittent” would have worked just fine. And couldn’t someone be “crying out in excitement and panic” instead of “vociferating in excitement and panic?” The entire book was riddled with this pretentiousness. And here’s another tip, free of charge- if a word is so obscure (exempting slang) that your word processor doesn’t recognize it, it might not be the best choice for a mass market fiction book. Just sayin’.

Now, I just KNOW that someone is right now asking, “So, you’re saying the book was too cerebral for you, Bev? Would hand puppets help?” As entertaining as I’m sure that would be, nuh-uh, that’s NOT it at all. What I’m saying is that there is a difference between writing intelligent prose and writing to impress the reader with your intelligence. The only impression the latter makes is that you’re trying too hard to impress me by being– wait, let me grab my thesaurus– lexiphanic (lÄ•ks`Ä­`făn´ĭk) a. 1. Using, or interlarded with, pretentious words; bombastic; as, a lexiphanic writer or speaker; lexiphanic writing.

Ignoring a couple of glaring inconsistencies, let’s move on to what I LIKED about the book. The first couple of pages were so intensely horrific that even I wasn’t sure if I would be able to continue reading (unlike Alicia, that was the only scene that made me flinch, though). I think the IDEA for Gaby’s character was interesting, and I think the budding relationship between Gaby and Luther is kind of… well… CUTE. I trust that their apparent psychic connection WILL be explored in a later book. The change in Monty by the end was also intriguing.

I fully expected to enjoy this book. The basic character and world building were there, it’s just… cancer ridden senior citizens as the evil minions?! Maybe next time Gaby could face a less unpropitious more worthy adversary.

Grade: D

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